Hello, GerMac

What I liked

I like the rapid rhythm of the poem and the story told.

What might need work

Please don't make any alterations until the story poem contest is over in case you break the contest rules.

is a friend in deed. - indeed is a compound word here.

Very suspicious, - this line seemed a bit out of place. I mean, the tone of this stanza is that the kids are very loud and outgoing. The 'mischievous' and 'sneak behind you' of the other lines doesn't tie in with the kids being suspicious of the guest.

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .