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 The Future of Technology  [E]
A humor piece proposing why we should value real connections over web connections.
by nathanhui
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there, Nathan. Nixie, here. I found your story on the Newbies page.




Not the most professional response after reading a story, but wow! What a complete pleasure to read something with no errors, and 'listen' to a writer who has a good voice.

Right from the beginning, the reader is cued in on the tongue-in-cheek mood. It's impossible not to laugh while reading this. Google Infinity. *Laugh*

So, this Nathan guy really was writing a report, or article, (for the purposes of this story). In this way, all aspects could be explored, as he could cite specific patient conditions and responses. This worked to bring the story right into the reader's home. Included were 'actual' patient experiences and 'quotes from doctors'. An MBA (MakeBetterAssociations) Priceless.

One side-effect not addressed was the probability of increasing obesity. Unless Infinity has a way to stimulate muscles to mimic physical exercise.

People often speculate about how increased virtual activity will change lives. Some say the less menial tasks people have to take on will increase creativity since mankind can turn their minds to loftier notions. I disagree. But it was an interesting point to make. Lower crime rates. But why? Because humans are not interacting with each other? Because they can immerse themselves in virtual violence?

I don't mean to destroy the levity here, or the ironic conclusion.

My one suggestion would be to increase font size for easier reading.
Oh, I couldn't guess what L1-LY stood for, and it's frustrating because it seems as if I should be able to figure that out.

I wish there was a bio to read. I'd be interested in learning a bit about the author.

Excellent reading experience, and thanks for the *Laugh*

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