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Hi The One Girl. Nixie, here. I found your poem listed here.
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Please be warned. I don't write poetry, so I can't really critique in specifics, but I can convey feelings and an overall impression. I'd rather reach someone emotionally rather than reaching perfection in mechanics, anyway.

In some ways, the lines in this poem shocked me. In my mind, women are completely over the gender bias, although I'm sure that's not true everywhere. At least in the States, women seem to be treated fairly.

In general, I don't think women are submissive. I'm not! For sure, I'm ladylike and polite, always looking for a way to make the other person more comfortable. Women are beautiful and exotic creatures. Those who are unaware of our majesty are either ignorant or afraid of us.

Some women are cruel, or hurtful. We have the same capacity for negativity as men. But we're also more peaceful. A generalization—men are wired aggressively and they are the ones who create wars.

I noticed the YA genre for this poem. I hope a girl reading this would disagree with these observations. I mean, we nearly had a woman for President of the United States. The final stanza is the real truth, except for the part about breaking the chains. Maybe we come from completely different backgrounds and experiences. I hope what you've written here is not true for you, or women you know.

Oops
mouth sowed closed. > sewn closed

*Questionw* Countless say we are women with our ladylike qualities are in our genes,
I think there's an extra [are] in this line.

Well, as promised, I poured out my feelings. I didn't mean to offend, I simply had a strong reaction and was compelled to voice my opinion.



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