The title theme is interesting and made me curious as I wonder who the survivor is and if he will give in.

The poem really shows the warrior's possible reasons for surrendering through all the hardship and yet hope reigns at the end. The symbol of climbing the mountain, the samurai life is vivid and relevant to make the point.

I noticed a typo in verse 5: "throw" needs to be "throws".
I wondered if "quest of survival" needs to be "quest for survival". I am pondering the connotation.

The verses flow in a coherent fashion and puncutation serves the read for meaning. It is interesting that you stray from the couplet format in the last verse. It adds an emphasis to the idea that he does not give up in true samurai fashion.

Thanks for this inspiration and sharing experience that we can all relate to.

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