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Hi Survivor48 ,

I am Lorraine and I am reviewing your piece "Invalid Item"  in affiliation with "Simply Positive Review Forum " .

Title/Brief Description/Genres: You've got a title that demonstrates what your poem was about. When I read the title, I knew I had to read the poem, as my dog is definitely a stress reliever. Your brief description is also good, and adds an extra element, mentioning your "best friend" further demonstrates your love for your dog.

First Impression: A poem that I can definitely relate to in every thing you mention (besides the dog's name *Wink*). Each line reminded me of things my dog had done to cheer me up.

Word Choice: You've got great asymmetry between the line describing your feelings, and the line describing your dog calming them down. *Thumbsup* The one thing I think is that this poem could've been slightly more emotional with regards to how your dog helps you. I'm not rating you down for it though, as some people don't write emotional poems, and that's totally fine.

Spelling/Grammar: No errors spotted here.

Closing Thoughts: Thanks for the entertaining read. I've got my dog right next to me as I type this, and I can't help but smile when I think of her and this poem, so thanks for that.

Lorraine

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