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 Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!  Wow! You really capture the devestation of a twister with vivid images. I think your title could be direct and short: Choose one word like Twister!  The poem has consistent rhyme and a more free style format in the verses, which suits the energy of the theme. I enjoyed reading it aloud for its drama and the details you chose to illustrate. Your use of the two adverbs in the second line first two lines is well accomplished and I did not trip on the long words! Your enjambments are used for good effect. eg "hung","hay", "shower" I think a period could be used after "heard" and "roared" as they are complete sentences. The last two sentences in the second verse are the weakest I think and the meaning of it was confusing to me.  The ending couplet sums up what man can do in contrast to the power and damage of the twister. Well said! Thanks for sharing this awesome vision. I really could imagine the wake of the storm.  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **
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You responded to this review 01/07/2017 @ 7:11am EST