Hi! I'm Fivesixer , and it's my pleasure to review your work today. Remember, this is only my opinion, so take whatever you'd like from it...after all, you're the author! The item I'm reviewing is "Invalid Item" .

First Impression: Hey Lisa! I'm reviewing this as part of my co-judging the poetry portion of "Project Write World" . Awww, is that toddler Lisa in the cover photo?

What I Really Liked: I'm generally a fan of free-verse poetry over anything else involving structure, and I wasn't able to determine any particular form or style being utilized here (feel free to correct me if I'm wrong! . I enjoyed your imagery, especially the "The Golden Rule lays tarnished" and "faces of our children/ Missing on milk cartons". Usually when there's no particular form used, the imagery really has to stand out, and you've achieved that here.

Spelling And Grammar: Nothing wrong here that I noticed. The one thing I look for in poems that are written like this one is consistency in punctuation...and not using any like you did here works much better than using it intermittently, or trying to force it in. Nicely played!

Suggestions: I don't know if this really counts as a suggestion, or if it's just me whining about my short attention span, but somewhere in the middle I felt lost...somewhere in the fourth to fifth parts. It's a tough subject to write about though, in part due to it being covered so often and in a myriad of ways, and really, it's probably just me not fully grasping it, as I have no real suggestions or means/ways of how to change anything.

Final Thoughts: Like I said earlier, it's a tough subject to write about, for sure. You've done an admirable job at tackling a subject that, really, could be happening in any city across every country. Thanks for entering PWW and sharing your work with us!

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to check out your work at WDC! I hope you found this review helpful and encouraging!

Write on!
-Norb



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .