Hi! I'm Fivesixer , and it's my pleasure to review your work today. Remember, this is only my opinion, so take whatever you'd like from it...after all, you're the author! The item I'm reviewing is "Invalid Item" .

First Impression: Hey Andy! I'm finally getting around to finishing off your package from "New Merit Badge Commissioning" ...sorry about the delay! Even though this is "three poems in fifteen minutes", it only counts as one review and I think the idea behind it is pretty neat...I'm not sure I could pull it off under pressure like that.

What I Really Liked: I know you probably didn't pick the prompts, but I like how they're set up. You've managed to create a short trilogy, which is about as impressive as writing three short poems in fifteen minutes. I also find your ending very poignant and true; almost as if to say "while the rest of what's above these final two lines is important, we need to realize this truth before it's too late".

Spelling And Grammar: I didn't notice anything wrong or out of place.

Suggestions: Only one little thing that I'm curious about...the word "malign" in "Hate". Maybe it's just me drawing a blank (entirely a possibility) but I've never seen it used like that...when I was reading this my brain automatically read it as "maligned", and then when rereading it I wanted to say "malignant". And this isn't really a suggestion so much as just my opinion on what was going through my head while reading this.

Final Thoughts: As I stated at the beginning, I'm not sure I could come up with something readable in 15 minutes while working with three separate but intertwined prompts, but you did and you managed to do it quite well. A Racecar Writer MB Challenge...looks like something I'll have to jeep an eye out for...all the more reason I'm glad I came across this when flipping through your port.

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to check out your work at WDC! I hope you found this review helpful and encouraging!

Write on!
-Norb



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