Hi! I'm Fivesixer , and it's my pleasure to review your work today. Remember, this is only my opinion, so take whatever you'd like from it...after all, you're the author! The item I'm reviewing is "Invalid Item" .

First Impression: Review #2 from "New Merit Badge Commissioning" ...was looking for something kinda short and interesting, and the title hooked me (along with the description). It's kinda funny how on the surface, everyone's pockets contain pretty much the same stuff, but what that stuff does when we're not fiddling around with it...I have to admit, this is the first time I've ever pondered it .

What I Really Liked: I have a secret admiration of people who write poetry using certain forms and sty;es and schemes and whatnot. It takes a bit of patience and some skillful wordplay at times, and I definitely don't have patience...I say what I wanna say how I wanna say it. And I don't believe I've ever read anything in this particular form before, so I've learned something new, and that's always a good thing.

Spelling And Grammar: You know what you're doing. Far be it from me to tell you any different.

Suggestions: Absolutely none. I'll admit I wasn't crazy about the fourth stanza, but then I remembered the description and it all clicked and made sense (I'm not much of a fantasy person so the references threw me off at first and seemed to alter the tone of the piece, but I smoothed it over in the second read-through). Also, here's where I'd say "What's an Oyster Card?" (I did have a hunch which turned out to be correct), but instead I'll thank you for providing a definition below (although I maybe would've considered using a footnote, but that's just me).

Final Thoughts: Dude, this is a fun, whimsical little piece about something so common, yet how often is it ever explored poetically? This definitely brought a smile to my face!

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to check out your work at WDC! I hope you found this review helpful and encouraging!

Write on!
-Norb



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .