Review number # 6 week of: 1/4-1/11


Hi Catdok

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

As a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Lawn Mower Steeple Chae


First Impression: The poem spread across the page is not visually appealing to this reader. I did find the story amusing, I've mowed a few lawns myself.

What needs your attention: The words in bold face I take are for a contest entry. I did scroll back up to see that they are for the Writers Cramp contest. It helps if the author lists them all together at the bottom of the page so the reader understands the purpose.
The flow is smooth with your word choices and the required words. My only knitpik is the poem sprawled across the page, it was distracting from your work.

Favorite Parts: The darn brass gadget in the grass. That made me chuckle and remember how many times my mowing was interrupted with toys left on the lawn by my children and then my grandchildren. Matchbox cards were rough on the mower blade.

Overall Impression: This was a delightful reminder of my own mowing experiences to read. Your word choices complimented the required ones without feeling forced, nicely done.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure! Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .