Hi! I'm Fivesixer , and it's my pleasure to review your work today. Remember, this is only my opinion, so take whatever you'd like from it...after all, you're the author! The item I'm reviewing is "Invalid Item" .

First Impression: Hi again Sally! SS Review #3...since I was going to give one of your items an Awardicon, I wanted to be sure I read unawarded items (because that's what I do), and I ended up on this one. Yes, the softer side of me wanted to also read something that wasn't gonna break my head, but give me a soft place to land and snuggle up in.

What I Really Liked: I like very much that your daughter has a mom that's so willing to pour her heart out like this on her milestone birthday. Rather than lay out a sort of timeline-ish recounting of the years, you let your heart and your feelings guide your words, and it's evident how close you two are and how much you care about her. It's really special to see written out, and I hope you've shared this with her...I remember my 21st birthday, and how my own mother and I were at the start of a nearly twenty years' long separation; even though we've reconciled and things are better than ever between us, we'll never get that time back. She's lucky to have you still as such a loving and caring presence in her life.

Spelling And Grammar: Sally, you could've spelled every other word in this wrong and it wouldn't have changed the sentiment. And I'm totally overlooking the use of the heart emoticon in place of a punctuation mark at the very end .

Suggestions: Not really a suggestion so much as just a curiosity...each stanza is four lines, but you broke up the last one into couplets. Was there any particular reason for this, or was it just for effect? It's totally fine either way and I don't have a preference one way or the other myself. And I didn't notice this in the other poems I read, but here you've got the title also included and underlined in the poem's text body...you don't have to do that; it's a tad bit redundant since the title is also at the top of the page. But don't let that reflect negatively on what's a beautiful tribute to your daughter on her birthday!

Final Thoughts: Just wonderful, Sally! If even ten percent more of the world's moms were just as kind and thoughtful, and had similar relationships with their kids, I'm sure the world would be a much better place. This was really a joy to read and it definitely brought a smile to my face. I'll say this one final time...it was truly a blessing being chosen as your Secret Santa and it made my holiday so much brighter that it was you, someone I've come to know and respect and cherish . From the bottom of my heart, thank you!

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to check out your work at WDC! I hope you found this review helpful and encouraging!

Write on!
-Norb



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .