What an interesting title that made me curious enough to ponder and read on! The picture is spectacular and evocative too. I love it!

Your expression captures vividly the nightly magics with descriptive words and images. The weave is tight and the form well balanced in a quatrain with a summative couplet. The rhyme and rhythm worked well and the last two lines are a perfect finish. I like the evocative word "dubious".

The poem unfolds the tale coherently and I could enter into the vision with ease. I wanted to ask "raise" what at the end of the second verse but I can see the meaning. I just expected the verb to tie to something in the next verse but the first line there is a complete thought.

In line 4 I think the verb "breathe" needs to be the noun "breath" to make sense.

I enjoyed the idea of an adventure and indeed you took me on a mystical one. So cool! Thanks for the wonderful conception and crafting.

You responded to this review 01/15/2017 @ 9:52pm EST

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