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| (3.5)| Hello David, I enjoyed reading your story. I am no expert and what's following is my humble review which you may choose to ignore.  It was a really inspiring story. People do need to stand up and stand up together. I liked the way your protagonist took the first step that inspired other to follow him. Near the end you said: I pulled my car over to the very edge of the road, and started talking.-- It was a bit confusing. started talking to whom? There are a few suggestions: it must me bad as I sat: it must be bad... way down my check,: my cheek, who gathered disappeared: who had gathered... Please could you put double spaces in between paragraphs. Its too closely knit to read and sometimes I was getting confused about which line I was reading... Other than that it was a fine read...   RimaDHappy Writing  !!!  A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" power review...
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You responded to this review 02/12/2017 @ 7:19am EST