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| (4.5)  General Comments & Reader Reaction: Bullies of the school, the Murray Twins preyed on the helpless, who don't stand up for themselves like Stephanie. Kendra was teased too, but not as much, because she fought back. What they did to Stephanie lately was too much for both girls and they demanded payback bigtime. How they went about it was very wicked and evil, but they were very upset; well, Kendra was more so than Stephanie. Characters: Stephanie and Kendra against the bullies, the Murray Twins.  Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: The emotion was turning toward hate, especially after the twins pushed Stephanie's face in shit. I have a feeling I would have felt the same. The mood travels from shock to action on getting back at the Murray Twins. The atmosphere goes from sane to insane, with a Ouija board, a spell that conjures up an evil spirit that wants something in return.  Setting & Imagery: The setting takes place in Kendra's bedroom where this conjuring takes place. The imagery of the Dark Guardian consists of a purple ring of fire that starts small, flaring up into a controlled shape of a man.  Plot & Pace: The plot is thought out with a saying: Be careful what you wish for, you just may get it.The pace is plotted out just right, going from scene to scene as the story progresses into an evil plan, take care of the Murray Twins once and for all.  Themes: The story consists of two bullied girls who are seniors in high school who want revenge. Structure & Consistency: The structure is well thought out and it's consistent right to the conclusion. Writing Style & Grammar: I love how you write these horror/scary stories that always has a scary end. You always come up with these scary scenarios When will your characters learn?  I hope never. Favorite Lines: “Those fucking bitches cut it off during economics,” Stephanie wailed, and held up her long braid as if she displayed a sacred object. “They said there was a high demand for lice hotels in Honduras and just cut off my braid.” Overall Impression & Conclusion: How can anyone be so mean? This is invading Stephanie's personal appearance, and these twins needed to be thought a lesson. Only not to the extent Kendra went to...  WriteOn!  Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jeannie    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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