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One Mis-Step  [13+]
Dialogue only flash fiction. Guess what happened and to who.
by Cheri Annemos
Review of One Mis-Step  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Cheri!
I know doing a dialogue only story isn't easy for some, but you did a nice job with this. I like the mystery you put into it by not letting the readers know just what exactly has befallen Phil, not to mention Liz's attitude about getting him down. And as far as spinning is concerned, I'd be turning purple myself if I was only spun around one single time! Seriously, ever since going on a carnival ride (the Octopuss) when I was only 5 years old I get dizzy just turning around once, so I can certainly empathize with Phil!
Well done, Cheri! Not sure how this did in the contest, but it looked like a winner to me!
Kee ponw ritin gon, and have a fantastic day!
PS-I'm returning some of those GPs. Thanks anyway, but that just seems like too many for such a short review as this!

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