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| (4.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"    HI survivor48 I am here with a review to celebrate you!   Oh I was drawn to the title as it gave me the idea of serenity and after a long day it appealed to me!  Your poem suggests some good advice about taking time to relax and be in the moment. The image of the recliner and "lay back" is effective for getting the reader into the vision and symbolize the relaxation.Your last two verses speak directly to the reader and is like a meditation.!  I was wondering how effective it would be to have the other verses maintain the same direct voice. eg."put your legs... feel the tension....Let worry about stressors go...think about" One could then enter into the poem as a meditation.  Just a thought that came to me.In line one, do you mean "when you are totally at rest"?  The non rhyming couplets flow with ease and the tone is soothing and upbeat. I appreciated the calm reminder as we all need to find that space to renew mind and body! Thanks for sharing your message.  Light on the path as you write on!! eyestar    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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