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Life Without You  [E]
A thought filled drive... with a message about texting and driving
by Amay
Review of Life Without You  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* HI amay! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Fairy* I really enjoyed reading this story as it was very moving. Your voice is potent and I could enter into the vision and mind of the speaker. The short paragraphs and variety of line lengths flowed well in a coherent way and I was not thrown out by any major glitches. *Thumbsup*

*Fairy*It is rather evocative as I do not know the reason she is leaving, when Love is present. I thought maybe she had some trauma issues as it seems it is not the first time she left.

*Fairy* Her emotional state is quite evident and the text message takes on a deeper message by the end of the story. How sad! "no matter how many miles"..wow!

*Fairy*The message about texting and driving is so apparent here. And you end with a definite resolution to her "relationship" issue. I would still like to know why she is leaving. It is a very dramatic read.

Thanks for sharing this and taking me on this journey. Whew! Well done!*Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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