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 | birthday cake  [13+] my niece recently had her sixth birthday--and I did take enough insulin to match the cake  |
| (4.5)| I came across this item on the Poetry Genre page.  Let me tell you, this was just too "sweet" for words!  You did a fine job painting a picture of a six-year-old's birthday party. I loved the descriptions of the cake, the death by sugar vivid imagery that even made my taste buds cringe at the thought. Making it ever so difficult to be around this event, the poor diabetic aunt had to boost her insulin in anticipation of the confetti covered frosting covering the cake.Loved this: "intermingled with funfetti because six years old is all about ponies and rainbows of confetti bursting from the cake"  Clever choice of word, "funfetti." I totally pictured that covering the chocolate buttercream frosting. I take it from the bold word, "confetti," that this was written for a contest with a word prompt. Good way to weave it into the poem so that it was a natural fit.Well done!  Until next time--write on! Regards, WebWitch 
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You responded to this review 02/22/2017 @ 8:04pm EST