Hello Dave . I'm Charlie and I'm helping to judge Round 73 of "Invalid Item" , so I thought I would leave a bit of feedback on your poem. Thanks for sharing your writing with us. I hope this review finds you well.


Title/General Thoughts/Subject Matter: Have you been peeking at my couch, Dave? My cats just love to jump from couch to couch and really dig their claws in on those landings. I love the juxtaposition of a title like 'Scars' with such a cute poem about kitties. It's pretty cool.


What Worked: I really loved the scars on furniture line. It almost reminds me of something that would be in a song: Paw prints across my heart and scars on furniture Are you into Meowtown? Scars on furniture was a great way to express something that all cat owners groan about regularly without directly talking about how cats tend to scratch things up.

You also followed the Cinquain syllable count perfectly. And, yes, I counted.


Technical Issues/Suggestions: I didn't super love the last line of the poem. It makes sense, of course, because you're talking about cats, but it was a bit unexpected and didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the lines as well as I'd hoped the last line would. Still, it's just a cute little onomatopoeia and I can't be mad at that.


Final Thoughts: Overall, I thought this was a nice little dedication to the cats around the world who are forever tugging at our heartstrings and tearing up our furniture. Thanks again for sharing your work with us and good luck!


Best wishes,





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .