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Summer Storm  [E]
Poetry depicting how I enjoy watching a summer storm and going to sleep listening to them.
by tj ~ endeavors to persevere!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Your first verse is shorter in line length, and second verse would be easy to match to it.

Take out the first word-'above'
Take out 'distant'

Mind, these are just suggestions.

Love the third verse. I could feel the goose bumps.

Maybe 'as dust and debris fly by'?

Sleep while storm is raging? You are a heavy sleeper. lol The apple tree branches scraping my walls wake me up.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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