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Okay, I just saw how super-super short this chapter is, so I figured I'm just completely useless if I don't go ahead and review this one, too.

Ugh, this picture just reminds me I need to do dishes.

I'm not loving your title. It's a little—forgive me for this—boring. It seems to say, “Nothing of interest will happen in this chapter,” and that's wrong! I am always interested in Brock's thoughts, and even though I do imagine he'd call these thoughts idle, they don't seem so and so it makes me sad that this is the title. Even just a really simple action title like, “doing the dishes” would be better.

Now, just as a warning, the only thing in the copy-paste section here are technical comments. The chapter's so, so short that it just feels right to jot those down and then talk about the content afterward. So here we go.


In his twenty-five years in the Bureau,
         I think “in the Bureau” is okay, but with the other “in” it's reading funny-repetitious, and I know “with the Bureau” is right.

He should ask her next time they met,
         Should ask her what? The context leading up to this does not clue me in.

because his professional curiosity had many questions about it.
         Sounds funny, that his professional curiosity could have questions. {e:squints one eye} Maybe a word overhaul would be best? Like: because it has piqued his professional curiosity
         Just...as a thought. I don't even think I like what I just did there, but I wanted to have an example.

he wouldn’t mind to stay.
         That “to stay” should be “staying.”

Brock knew he was happy to be back in his hometown, have the chance to be more in touch with his friends, and even share part of his work with some of them.
         Simple fix would be to change “have” to “having” and “share” to “sharing”

it’d been nice, being back to the field with
         That “to” should be “in”: back in the field

it was not to get attached to anyone,
         Word order: was to not get


I was happy to get this little slice of Brock thoughts, musing over things like that case, that he enjoys working with Russell (really like that!), and what he thinks of staying in Boston vs. going home to DC. Nothing huge or groundbreaking, but like the few things I didn't know I needed to know until I was reading. It fleshes him out and also gives the episode a little “rest,” and it's a great place for that, coming right after the attack on Young.

I'm a fan, you know.

Chy

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