Hello, Angus ! I'm Charlie. How are you doing today? I'm working on reviewing different WDC genres for the "Invalid Item"  and stumbled upon your story, "What?" . I hope this review finds you well! Thanks for sharing your writing with us.

First Impression/Hook: Wow, I found a nonsense story. Awesome! Nonsense stories are not a very popular genre, in case you ever wondered. That makes you unique, see? The opening to this story had an awesome hook. It read like the narration to Stranger Than Fiction or something like that. Can you get Morgan Freeman to narrate this? I'd watch the movie.

Plot/Pacing: This was a quick story, an easy read. I can't complain about that. This is the very dramatic tale of the day Angus' internet briefly went down, and then, ya know... other stuff happened. Nonsense indeed!

Characterization/Dialogue: I was on the edge of my seat wondering what would happen to that dude Angus. I can't imagine waking up with no internet. This should really be labeled as a horror story. The middle english dialogue made it all the more nonsensical. "What?" is definitely the appropriate title for this piece.

My Favorite Part: The ending, of course! Even in a nonsensical story, no one could have seen that ending coming. Poor Mrs. Angus to see such a horrifying thing at the end of her journey to the living quarters!

Mechanics/Suggestions: Nothing here. All the grammar and spelling is good and how am I gonna critique something that wasn't supposed to make sense in the first place? If anything, it made more sense than I thought it would.

Overall: Your story was fun and entertaining. I laughed at the juxtaposition between the internet being down and the dialogue being middle english. Good one, Angus!


Best wishes,

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