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| (4.0)   Happy Earth Day Mrs. B.Ray!   Congrats on your pretty ribbon on a Rainy Day!  Your poem was fun to read and I like you describe the weather in each verse and then give your reflection on it. It adds a personal touch. I had to laugh at the question about snow as I can so relate to it. We have had a strange winter too!  You showed the confusion well.I also grinned at the good thing about cloudy weather--the rooster! Too funny!! I like the attitude of always a silver lining.  The last two verse change in tone as if the blues are taking over after trying to find the happy in a rainy day. You almost give in but then you end with the wish, which is hopeful and leave us to dream of new adventure. Quite a journey.  I did not notice a set pattern to the verse rhythm and the rhyme scheme was consistent and assisted the flow and poetic nature. Instances of assonance as in "thunder rumbles" and the long "i" sounds in places like: lightning, strikes, cry, sky, mine etc. add flow and interest to the soundscape as I read aloud.The images reflect the elements of weather and the verbs are active. I wondered about the "quite hard" description and thought it could be more vibrant. Maybe find a more interesting adjective.  I enjoyed the vision as I was drawn into your feeling about the weather and could imagine the thunder and building storm. I like the personification of the lightning and it can do what it wants. Thanks for sharing this evocative expression that made me smile even on a dreary day. Light on the path as you write on!eyestar  
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