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Review of Climate Change  
Review by eyestar~*
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Earth* *Heart* Happy Earth Day Paul! *Sun**Tree*


*Snow4* Ahhh! Not winter again. LOL But in my search for Earth Day reads I saw this title and the theme so fits the task and is one that is vital to understand. Your response to the prompt picture is enlightened! *Delight*

*Snowman* This kyrielle rocks and I really like your choice of repeating line as it emphasizes the idea of climate change with a query. Brilliant interpretation of the picture that is rather grotesque.
The form elements appear solid to me with the rhyme scheme, quartrain lines and refrain. It is interesting how the form repeats the two lines of the poem as its couplet ending. I imagine this takes time to get coherent. You have done a masterful job of creating vivid images to support the query.

*Snowman* The poem is fun to read aloud with a good flow and soundscape. The punctuation and enjambments were effective, though I thought maybe a period was needed after "snow" in the second verse as the next line seems to be complete sentence on its own. *Confused*

*Earth* The personification of the snowman wanting revenge is brilliant and adds a dark tone to the piece, and mimics the picture's tone. It makes sense as one can imagine being upset if climate change is killing you! *Shock* Genius way to make a commentary.*Salute* Way to go!
Light on the path as you write on!

*Bird*Thanks for cawing "woe" in this masterful kyrielle with it's haunting refrain. *Starstruck*
We need to get this message to be heard!

eyestar

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