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 |  | Rocking It Old Skool  [13+] Make your voices heard about the world's state of affairs.  |
| (5.0)| Hi iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen Guess who?  I'm pleased to read and comment on your page "Rocking it Old Skool" (I can't figure out if there's an item number or not ) on behalf of "Earth Day Challengers" . First Impression/Thoughts: I know, I know. You said nature or environmentally oriented but opening up a discussion about the ills of the world directly addresses the issues we face. Politics is a major impediment to unifying behind a solution and that's addressed here. One person was complaining about the price of fuel - isn't that a microcosm of our problems? We want cheap energy but moving to alternatives will raise the cost in the short term. Too many understand the problem but will vote their pocketbooks in the short term and willingly push the problem down the road for their own gain.  Creativity/Impact:Encouraging discussion and understanding the issues at the root level is crucial to finding a solution. Creating this forum is a step in the right direction. Very creative.  Message/Theme: Uhhh, Earth Day? In your own words, "Here's your opportunity to voice your thoughts and opinions." An open forum is an open mind. Technique/Technical Notes: I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. I encourage you to consider what I offer but always follow your instinct and heart. You are the poet. Title: I thought you named this well, if not just a bit ambiguous . My biggest issue is that it lies "off site" on your own page and I'll be is overlooked a lot regardless of title. Grammar/Wording: Nothing to note  Form/Flow: Large easy to read font, a garish orange background, a wickedly cool monkey, and a clear invitation. What's to comment on?   Overall Rating/Final Thoughts: An eye opening read, to be sure. There has to be a way to make this more accessible from your port to encourage the exchange of ideas and to test the temperature of the masses. Just something to think about Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today.Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more. Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2017, Ken 
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You responded to this review 04/25/2017 @ 10:42pm EDT