Hello!

I hope you don't mind, for this chapter and the next one I'll be writing shorter reviews - I just don't want my opinions getting too redundant throughout the course of the story.

A lot of the things I've said about the previous chapters apply here as well. I think that the pacing was even, the action to dialogue was well balanced, and it kept moving the story forward.

I do feel like you've slid back a little in making Branston a more likeable character, however. Normally the story about his father is the sort of thing that would have made him more sympathetic, but his motivations seemed a little unclear. He seemed a little too trusting with someone he didn't know, very emotional while telling the story and then very uncaring after. Then his actions later on in the story were damaging to what respect/sympathy I had worked up for him.

The other thing that I did really like about this chapter however, was that there were more tie ins to the dragons. Now that I'm starting to learn/hear more about the dragons I'm getting all the more excited to actually see them appear more in the story.

Overall I still like the general direction that the book is heading in, and I hope that when you're done with the story that you're working on now you go back to finish this one - because I definitely want to read the end.

All the best,




-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .