This was a really good chapter!

At the beginning of it I was starting to wonder when there was going to be some more substantial progress in the plot - the steady pacing was starting to border on a little too steady, if you know what I mean. I was hoping for something really dramatic to happen - and then it did.

I liked that the idea of the wraiths wasn't overstated - especially since wraiths (or wraith-like things) are fairly common in the genre. That in combination with the dramatic, eerie ending, worked well.

I also liked that Branston did have remorse for leaving Faldashir - and while I don't feel like that entirely made up for my disconnection from him in Chapter 5, it definitely helped me forgive him a little.

I'm sad that I'm out of chapters, and I really do hope that this is something you get back to sometime in the near future.

All the best,

-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .