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I found this item by clicking on the Community tab on the left of the screen and selected Read a Newbie. This was one of the items on the page, and the title lured me in.

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An interesting humorous prose used to make an introduction, this grabs your attention through some creative tools. Placement of the writing, as in centering each line, helps to broadcast the chaos of life. It helps to show that not all is as it appears, there may be a hidden message or chaotic purpose.

Capitalization of one of the lines draws attention and showcases the humor or irony of the piece.

I did find one of the lines to not wring true with the rest, and that is due to one phrase...."who you are". The reason this doesn't ring true is that the "who" was never questioned, but the "why you are here" was brought to question, thus I would reconsider the wording at the end of the fourth line.

I also like the way you use placement and open space to showcase a pause for the reader to reflect on the previous line, and that is the large amount of space between the 7th and 8th lines.

Leaving the audience with a question can keep them coming back for more, and that is exactly as this piece is. I feel that this prose needs a small amount of work but overall this is a decent piece.





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