Hedgehog's Dilemma [E] My brief description is still too short |
______________________________________________________________________ DISCLAIMER I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions. ______________________________________________________________________ Hello! I found this in the review request thread and thought that I would drop in to leave you with my thoughts - though I should be upfront about the fact that I am by no means an expert in poetry. The poem looks good and overall I feel good about it. I thought that the sentiment was presented nicely. As for it being jarring, I think that it's pretty smooth up until the end. Your last two couplets seemed to have a different meter than the rest of the lines in the poem. Even though I like the way that those four lines sounded together (and it might have been my favorite part of the poem) it did break up the rhythm when I read the poem out loud. Anyway, I hope that this was helpful and that you keep writing poetry. Even with the one part that wasn't as smooth (for me, anyway) I think that it was a good read, and I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing your work, and I wish you all the best in all your writing endeavors. Sincerely, -Cat ______________________________________________________________________ ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ______________________________________________________________________ My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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