Hello!

I saw in the review request forum that this is your first post on WdC. Congratulations on that, and welcome to WdC. Hopefully you're having a good time finding your way around and getting the sort of feedback that you want on this piece.

I think that this is a beautiful idea for a piece, and I really enjoyed some of the imagery that you used in it.



^^ I loved this line, I thought it was very inspirational.

The one thing that I would suggest would be to keep working this piece, and polishing it up. I feel like there was a lot of word repetition and while that isn't necessarily an issue - it is something that dilute really beautiful work, at least in my opinion. I think with a little bit of editing this could be something both lovely, and powerful.

I hope that this review was at least a little helpful, and I wish you all the best here on the site. Thanks for sharing your work, and hopefully I get to read more of your stuff in the future.

Sincerely


-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .