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| (4.0)  I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Review generator. This was an amusing tidbit about the perils of being a mouse in a cat's world. The lines were rhyming, using pretty much nursery rhyme-type of rhythm, possibly meant for a children's piece. I think rhymes like this have their place, and can be added-to via several parts to keep the child's interest going and to encourage reading to a child and thus nudging the child a bit into loving to read.  This is where poems like this become very helpful, for if we can get children interested in reading, we will have helped in the general literacy program for a lifetime. That child no undoubtedly will encourage reading in much the same way with her own children. Suggestion:  Since I find this too common a rhyme for most adult's interest, the brief description could be more subtle, leaving out the life and death proportions. Perhaps, "A mouse can hide, too!" Anyway, I'm sure you could figure out a description that would attract the youthful reader, and maybe, place this under "Children's for the genre, rather than horror/scary. A reader will expect something really frightening and feel they were misled by the genre type and brief description.Otherwise, this is a fine rhyme -- it just needs to be marketed a little better.  Until next time--write on! Regards, WebWitch   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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