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Talk about pulling your reader in and leading her down possibly creepy path.

You build up the suspense very well in this flash fiction, tale. You lead one to believe there is something nefarious hiding in that glove compartment, and that there was something suspicious about that man.

I had a feeling there was something more than meets the eye awaiting the reader at the end of the story. I was actually working out possible endings in my mind, amid her "sweating it out" and doubts.

Observation:

"I put it in the gps, see?” He pointed to the gps on the dash."
The abbreviation of GPS should be capitalized in each instance, here.

I loved the ending! It was a fine twist and it probably taught that very suspicious woman not to jump to conclusions so easily. I guess the shock was smoothed out for her at the end.

And, although it came in a small package filled with little bites of suspense for the reader, it left a huge impact.

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