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 Thief Of The Sands  [E]
A poem in the telling of a mischievous jackal
by Aniu
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Anlu! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Wow! What a unique poem! I love the personification of the jackel. You have really captured its essence as an animal and totem as well I think. The title drew my attention as it is quite evocative as a metaphor.

*Wand*I enjoyed reading your free style with its steady rhyme scheme and while the rhythm is not even in each verse, I was not thrown out of the flow when I read it aloud. Vibrant voice true to the end.


*Wand*The imagery is vivid and I liked the idea of "being the moon...and the darkness on the land" as if he lurks around at night.

*Quill* I noticed that your rhyme scheme does change up a bit from abcb to abab. Usually in poems we try to keep the same scheme for coherence. *Wink* Still it was a wonderful vision!

Thanks for sharing your craft here at WDC! It was fun to read and imagine! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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