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 The Sitting  [E]
Some days, in the face of uncertainty, might as well stay put. Why bother proceeding?
by Dave's Pen
Review of The Sitting  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Dave's Pen! This piece popped up on Read and Review! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight* The image evoked by your title is intriguing as you make "sitting" a noun! Good hook! I can imagine just sitting and noodling til the force moves you! *Laugh*

*Wand* This is a unique expression as it is interesting how you put the poem together. I did not really notice a form and yet it has wonderful inner rhyme and a philosophic tone. I wanted to move the second part of the third line down on its own so it does not look so long compared to others--more poetic looking. LOL and it would mirror your first line.

*Wand* I enjoyed the images of the "ark of time" and verbs like "entices" with "devices".
The flow of the first line and the beginning of the third line are fast paced and I liked the alliterative part "to which, for what..etc! "

*Wand* I think one could take this as a serious event, and yet it made me smile to think about one sitting around with nothing to prove. It is rather profound too. I think the word "loose" needs to be spelled "lose" if you mean to lose something, lost! Or if you mean "Loose like a tooth." then you have spelled it correctly. *Smile*

I am glad you did not sit too long ...and shared this thought-provoking vision! I think we can all relate! *Starstruck* Congrats on posting your first items at WDC.

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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