Hello,

I found this in the review request forum and thought that I would drop in to leave my thoughts.

I like that you took some really dark feelings and thoughts and were able to make something like this that was constructive and poetic. That's always something that I really appreciate seeing. I don't know how autobiographical the piece is (if it all) but reads very honestly and that really adds to its power.

There were a couple things that I think could have used a bit of editing and reformatting, but overall it reads pretty smoothly. If this is a rough draft (or still being edited in any way) I think that you're headed in the right direction because the emotion is definitely there - and I think that's the most important aspect of a piece like this.

I hope that writing the piece has helped you set out what you intended while writing it, and that you continue to write new pieces.

All the best,


-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .