Hello!

I thought this was very good. It was concise, well-worded, and the end was just ambiguous enough to allow itself to be interpreted by the audience, which is the sort of thing that I really appreciate in my science fiction.

The only suggestion that I would really have for you, is to consider extending the piece a bit. At its current length it's very powerful for concise fiction, but I think that if you fleshed it out a little and slowed down the pacing, it overall might have had a slower impact because there would have been a little bit more time to bond with the protagonist before he receives his gift (and a few more glimpses into the world that he has colonized would be really cool to see.)

At its current length however, like I said, it was quite enjoyable. It's an entertaining, quick read that makes the reader think at the end, and a story with all of those things (especially in the genre of science fiction) is incredibly rare. You've done an awesome job with this and I hope to read some more of your work in the future.

All the best,



-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .