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 The dream-catcher.  [E]
A short poem about the effects of a dreamcatcher.
by inkwell
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Hiya inkwell! I am back with another review as I saw this item that appealed to me. I really like native arts and spirituality, so I could not resist. *Delight*


*Wand* Dreamcatchers are breathtaking and I have seen many different ones, and I took a workshop of creating them. Quite a process! You have captured both the purpose and some of the elements that make up a dreamcatcher in a simple way that any can understand. *Thumbsup*

*Wand* I enjoyed the image of "captured beads..." and the first line is eloquent and lovely image. I wondered if you need to have a definite subject in the first verse---you use "it's" and we know it refers to the title , yet I think it needs to be clear in the verse.
I love your first line. Maybe just add "protection is the dreamcatcher's intention" or something to clarify without wordiness. *Wink*

*Wand*Repeating "Protection" in the second verse works to emphasize. I wonder if you could even add more detail about how this is done. eg. the idea of bad dreams may not be known to some.

*Wand* "promise to the sleeping" I take to mean "help sleepers have peaceful dreams".
The purpose of feathers as guide is cool. It is an interesting idea " feathers guide promise" . *Smile*

*Wand* I like the last verse with its reference to children and the last line made me smile! *Thumbsup* One does need focus to create one.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your vision about this wonderful piece of art and its function. It brought back memories.! I have one in my room too--a gift from a friend. *Smile*

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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