House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Miguel's Duty

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the traveler at the door because I knew it was a code phrase. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

What needs your attention: I found no technical problems, or anything else that needed attention.

What part I liked best: I like Special Agent Miguel Garcia because despite the way he felt about the man he protected he still did his duty even if it meant he would die. I also like the detailed descriptions of the precautions to protect the president. The descriptions were written in active voice rather then a passive voice which helped keep my attention on the plot and on the actions Special Agent Garcia was taking.

Overall impression: In this exciting action/adventure story, the author did not mention the name of the president being protected. It was unnecessary for him to mention the name because the reader can tell who the president is by the description of the man. I enjoyed reading this story because of the active voice used to show the story's action rather then tell it. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .