House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Shelter - Chapter One: The War Begins

First Impression: The title and the description of this book aroused my curiosity. The first paragraph of this chapter hooked me with the description of the world on fire. The first person point of view is a good choice for this story because it focuses on the action and the reactions of the main character.

What needs your attention: In this phrase,but Ray could see three more hurrying around the back of the buildings, the point of view changes from first person to third person. I suggest rewriting this sentence to first person.

What part I liked best: I like the description of the battle because it showed the action rather then telling it. I also like the speaker because he is a sympathetic and intriguing man. I also like the woman because she appears to be a sympathetic and strong female character.

Overall impression: This chapter introduces the main character and the plot through the character's words and actions. The end of this chapter arouses my curiosity for the next. I enjoyed reading this chapter because the action kept me focused on the plot and the characters. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .