House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Price Adjustments or Magic as a visual art

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jack Hutchinson waiting for the repair guy.

What needs your attention: There is a missing opening quotation mark in this phrase, Oh, no, I suggest adding the quotation mark. I found nothing else that needs your attention.

What part I liked best: I like both Jamie and Joey because they are intriguing and sympathetic characters. I also like the way Joey repaired the computers. My favorite sentence in this story was Joey's explanation of his charges. I laughed aloud when I read that because it made sense. Knowing where to hit something to make it work is the most expensive part of a repair job.

Overall impression: Jack Hutchinson has a problem, it is fifteen minutes before the opening bell rings and his computer system is down. His secretary, Jamie, has called the repair man and they are waiting for him to arrive. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good ace while building to suspense and laughter. I enjoyed reading this funny story because it reminded me of when I worked outside my home. Write one.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .