House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: No One Home

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker celebrating being alone in the apartment.

What needs your attention: I found no technical problems or anything else that needs your attention.

What part I liked best: I cannot decide which part of this story I like best. The second paragraph made me laugh with the vision of the speaker standing on his head on the couch and burping the Family Guy theme. The message on the answering machine made me laugh because it emphasized that single men lived in the house. I also like the cat because it reacted like a normal cat would to attention.

Overall impression: In this funny story the speaker is alone in the house and wants to celebrate. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense. The speaker gets a bit carried away by being alone, and frees his imagination to speculate on various scenarios giving himself a bit of a fright. I enjoyed reading this funny story. While it did not make me laugh all the way through, there were paragraphs that caused me to laugh aloud. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .