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Game of Thrones  (13+) Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st #456789 by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm

Overall Impression: Your poem "Let Me Go" is well written; however, I am not sure I follow. My mind goes to a drug overdose, but I am unclear. It seems the poem is a desperate cry for help, whether it is drugs or escape of emotional pain. I read this about 4 times and I see the ambulance ride and the person on life support, but still I am not sure of the "deeper truth" within.

Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling: I did not note any errors in your poem. It is well written and flows naturally.

Parting Comments: Although I do not feel as I got to the root of this poem I do like it. I, however, would appreciate a sentence at the end explaining what is being read for those of me who do not "get it" - Your description says it is a bad experience you went through, yet I find myself wanting to know more. Why is there an ambulance ride? Why do you seem to be on life support? Why do you want to be let go?... I want more! ;)

You responded to this review 09/05/2017 @ 12:00pm EDT

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