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Review of Out the Window  
Review by Purple Princess
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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"Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation

OVERALL IMPRESSION -
This was a fantastic Blink entry. I've tried this contest and it's not that easy to get so much in out of so few words. This was a complete story.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The last line. That, of course, would mean that Molly would be caught, no way around that really unless there was some big miracle. At first, I was shocked but then it made me laugh.

PLOT~
Molly is having an affair and her husband comes home unexpectedly. Her first instinct is to have her lover hide under the bed, but he is quick to point out that that's the first place a suspicious spouse would look before checking the closet. Then he makes his daring escape.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT~
Molly is quick to move once she realizes she could be caught. Her poor lover is so scared he doesn't even think before he jumps out the window, not realizing there's an empty pool below. What a painful way to exit.

DIALOG~
Their quick conversation was great. I could picture him panicked when she suggested he hide under the bed. Calling her crazy just about summed up that suggestion and I agree, it's the first place someone would look if they thought another man had been in his bedroom.


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