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 |  | When I see you again...  [E] He peered through the window, the future filling his thoughts.  |
| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - This was a really good short story, filled with sadness. Your main characters uncertainty was hard to hide, almost as if he knew this would really be their last goodbye. It was easy to get lost in the scene because your descriptions were great. WHAT I LIKED BEST - The ending. That one haunting line about her smile not meeting her eyes really stood out. Even when they were in his bedroom, touching one another, kissing, making promises wasn't as big of a moment as when he looked at her for the last time. PLOT~ A solider is getting ready to go off to war, and he's worried not about dying, but that the woman he loves will move on while he's away. They make promises, she tells him she loves him, and yet as they say their goodbyes, he notices that her smile doesn't reach her eyes. That was a very descriptive moment that really showed why he was so worried in the first place. CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT~ They both were sad that he was leaving, that was easy to pick up on, but his heartache really pulled at my heart. I was so hoping there would be some hope here, and while there was, the ending dashed it all away. DIALOG~ The dialog was smooth. He needed to know she would be there, that she truly loved him and while she said she did and even went as far as saying she'd be waiting for him, he didn't buy it.   
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You responded to this review 08/08/2017 @ 9:17pm EDT