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| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - A lot of intensity in this one hundred words short story. Every word you choose stood out, carefully selected to make this piece shine and grip the reader. WHAT I LIKED BEST - The line that he heard much more than what they realized he did. That line left a lot to the imagination about how scary this situation could really be. Who are they? What do they want? What is truly happening here that he stands there for so long? PLOT~ He stands in the shadows, no movement, nothing to give himself away. The voice reminds him not to move, not to forget as he vows to stand there night and day and into the night again. Even the voices reminding him aren't enough to get him to flinch. CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT~ He has resolved himself into standing there for as long as it takes, no matter what. I cannot tell if it is an inner voice in italics, a voice in his head, or something more sinister. Since it's a dark piece, I would have to go with the latter, which is even more of a scary thought.This piece leaves a lot of questions as to who he is, they are, what is going on. Your descriptions as he stood there reminding himself to stay still were good and heightened the tension.   
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You responded to this review 08/08/2017 @ 9:57pm EDT