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 | Little David  [13+] She could only take so much  |
| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - This read like a truly horrifying tale right up until the very end. I couldn't believe how nonchalant she was about killing David as if it were an everyday occurrence. WHAT I LIKED BEST - The big surprise at the end. I never saw that coming and thought she was talking about her innocent little brother. You had me completely hooked with the way you pulled me into her thoughts and emotions. PLOT~ A girl of sick of David getting in her way, following her around and ruining her belongings and decides she's had enough and takes matters into her own hands. You had the perfect twist of an ending in the big reveal of who David really was. Even the reference as she wished she had grabbed the latex gloves from school added to the dark intent of the main character. CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT~ Bitterness and annoyance is the driving force behind your main character, which I totally understood. This played really well throughout your story and pulled the reader into it fully. DIALOG~ The only line of dialog was powerful, cryptic and downright scary.   
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