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Review by Purple Princess
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"Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation

OVERALL IMPRESSION -
I didn't see the ending coming and bought into the surprise party. That was when I wondered why Sir Crandhall wanted his money and would set a trap for him in the first place.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The surprise ending. It was clever the way you had it laid out, the tension is gone as Henry realized all of his friends were there to celebrate his birthday.

PLOT~
Henry sneaks into his dark house, knowing that Sir Crandhall has stolen his money and probably has left a trap for him. Once he makes it to his bedroom, he is pleasantly shocked to discover that his friends remembered his birthday and had a surprise party waiting for him.

CHARACTERS- DESCRIPTION~
Henry has forgotten all about his birthday and is happy when he makes it to his bedroom. Crandhall who did indeed have a plan and captures Henry.

DIALOG~
There was only one line of dialog but it wrapped up the story and was funny as well as Crandhall points out how well his little scheme worked. You included the prompt line well as Henry crept through his house, careful not disturb anything and give away that he was inside the house.

TECHNICAL~
he had knew his house -he knew or he had known
House Greyjoy image for G.o.T.

This would be my name.
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