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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Craig Henders, I am reviewing your story "3-D Breakfast (W.Cramp)" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This short story is about a married couple named Fred and Pam. One day Fred has a business meeting with one too many drinks, he begins to run late, completely ignores a yellow traffic signal, and winds up injuring his legs.

Fred becomes depressed, but he sees an infomercial one day about a "breakfast printer". The printer occupies Freddy's mind and he no longer dwells on his predicament, and before he realizes it, he is up moving around, walking better, and he is no longer depressed.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The short was well written. I have nothing to suggest for you at this time.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: This was entertaining short read. I really loved the interaction between the couples Pams worry over Fred's condition and Fred's depression. I am so glad that this short ended with an HEA. I felt like Fred deserved one!

This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely

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