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| (4.5)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - There is a lot of heat in this piece. A solid story WHAT I LIKED BEST - That you didn't rush this story along. You had great descriptions of the scene and showed what both characters were feeling and experiencing. PLOT~ A woman arrives at her destination to meet her lover. This is a dom/sub union and he wastes no time in getting her ready, leaving her kneeling on the floor as he prepared the room. Today he would be pushing her out of her comfort zone and hoping that she will do his bidding. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ They are both aware that she is his long before this encounter. His voice is commanding when he tells her what to do, and she is eager to please him. Her ability to wait, so close to going over shows how much she is into this kind erotic play. Great descriptions as the scene unfolded. I liked that she was so caught up in what she was doing that she hadn't even realized he'd moved from the chair to the bed. DIALOG~ Pushing her further to tackle her fears he makes her tell him how she feels. At first, she is shy about it but soon starts telling him what he wants to hear. Good job pulling your reader into the story and taking them on the ride with them. TECHNICAL~ She heard him move around during the room,--during doesn't work well here   
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You responded to this review 08/18/2017 @ 11:52pm EDT