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| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  OVERALL IMPRESSION - Great story about this garage sale item that turned out to be worth a fortune. I really wanted to smack Dan, so thank for portraying him badly enough to invoke that kind of emotion from me. WHAT I LIKED BEST - That Marie took it all in stride. I think if I were in her place I would've taken Dan out with one shot. PLOT~ Dan is only interested in his beer and ESPN. He's constantly ordering his wife, Marie around. Marie spots a garage sale across the street and heads over to looking around. Her old classmate is there, selling her father's things after having put him in a nursing home. Marie spots a painting and pays twenty dollars for it. Dan hates it and orders her to take it back. Marie returns the painting. A few weeks later they are watching television and a woman is on bragging about the painting she bought at a garage sale for a mere ten dollars. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ Marie who seems to go with the flow and not let too much bother her. Dan is mostly a jerk and doesn't treat his wife well. I loved the line about Evie and that bikini looking like a yellow jacket from an old movie. That made me laugh. Great descriptions in this short story. DIALOG~ Great job with Dan's dialog as he ordered Marie around. They seem like total opposites. Even Evie could hardly be bothered to interact. All of it worked well.   
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